This is a tribute to all our memories.
Those moments that lasted a lifetime.
They were the ones that isolated us
and concurrently wove us back together.
We were paired puzzle pieces.
Ones that stood out
never untangled in the cardboard box.
When the clouds shifted
and the sun lost its light,
our backs turned apart.
When sunrise painted the sky
delicate hands
no longer focused.
Instead, they jumbled us apart.
I sought for you.
I ran into walls
only to realize that I had been
coiled and caught by your trance.
We are pieces
dented and scattered
lost in a polychromatic puzzle.
I love this poem, Marie! I think my favorite aspect of it is your use of sunset and sunrise to create that change in time and emotion; it's really creative. My favorite line, though, might have to be the one about puzzle pieces never untangling in the cardboard box. I love seeing how your poem has changed since you first wrote it, and I can see how it developed.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is so cute and I love the idea of describing this with a puzzle, I would've never thought of that! My favorite lines was the last stanza and I feel like it shows how you can feel like you are so meant for someone but the timing and circumstances can just be so wrong.
ReplyDeleteYour poem gave me the chills Marie! I love how you described your idea using puzzle pieces and sunsets. You illustrated such a nice picture and it made the poem really understandable.
ReplyDeletealso, my favorite line was when you said "i had been coiled and caught by your trance." the wording you used was so vivid and descriptive, I loved it!
DeleteThis poem has so many layers and I can really see how the emotion and tone develops. My favorite part of this poem would have to be the last stanza or the last line, which really left an impression on me.
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