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Friday, May 31, 2019

Civilization

Hell yeah, I’m happy
In fact, I’m exuberant
With all this technology
I’m beyond jubilant


Why go outside?
Or leave my house at all?
It’s dangerous out there
I could trip and fall


Who needs the stars?
Instead let’s have lights
Around the whole city
So I can work nights


Sleep? Who wants it?
Such a waste of time
When I could be thinking
Of a new rhyme


Nature, sky, breathable air
Who needs it? Who wants it? Who even cares?


I wake up too early
And sleep too late
In the big suburban home
Which I actually hate


Fueled by coffee
And tons of fast food
I sit at my job
And grow increasingly rude


Forget hunting or gathering
Or walking around
Taking in the breeze
My feet on the ground


Forget my roots,
I’m past the desire
To sit with my tribe
And stare at the fire


It’s progress, I say
I throw out all my refrain
For a system which I
Can’t help but disdain


It’s the march of humanity
The beat of the drum
Just greater insanity
With more to come


What I was built for
Is now quite far gone
Replaced by the cities
In which I’ll live long


As buildings get taller, my brain just get smaller
And suicide rates - they keep on climbing


Civilization is truly
A beautiful thing

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3 comments:

  1. -my favorite aspect of the piece is your criticism of society and your sarcastic tone in the beginning of the piece
    -my favorite line is probably 'in the big suburban home/that i actually hate'
    -i like how you use rhyme scheme in your poem and the message overall

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  2. I found you satire very funny and your rhymes were well integrated and the words that rhymed did not seem out of place at all in the poem. Also, the ending brought it all together well by commenting on society with sarcasm.

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  3. I love the rhythm and rhyme scheme that this poem has, it does a lot to convey the overly-happy tone while the wording itself becomes increasingly depressing. I think my favorite lines would have to be "Forget my roots,/I’m past the desire/To sit with my tribe/And stare at the fire" or "It’s the march of humanity/The beat of the drum/Just greater insanity/With more to come". Both of them have excellent rhyming and rhythm while simultaneously having excellent wording that serves to move the poem in the intended direction which I can say from experience is really hard to do, so kudos to you. I think what really stands out to me is the message of this poem, and it's something with which I really agree.

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