A Concept
By Anna Smith
A concept that is never fully grasped
It slithers away into the darkness
yet it is the light
Slipping out of your hands like crystal water
Running through the gaps of your fingers,
As you desperately try to hold it
But it does not abide by anything
Only to itself
It whispers into your ear,
Telling you that the beautiful ocean has it’s jagged rocks
And the tranquil forests
Does have uncontrollable forest fires
A concept that is never fully grasped
Uneasy to contemplate
Yet willing to understand
I love how you personify the concept, especially because it strengthens the imagery so much! Your descriptive language really emphasizes how uncontrollable and contradictory the concept is.
ReplyDeleteI love how you don't describe what it is like to embrace the Tao, rather you describe the Tao in a more observational and remote sense. I like the language you use and your choice of vocabulary as well. It really helps me to imagine the Tao as something like water.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you structured your poem, because it creates pauses that add a lot more meaning to the overall idea. Also, the imagery that you used really contributed to make the poem seem more alive and real.
ReplyDeleteI like the description in your poems and how you used repetition to enforce your point.
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