take it in.
the soft crackle of crunching leaves,
the quivering whistle of air through oaken branches.
take it in.
the tingle of your skin as it soaks up drops of honey-sweet sun.
the shiver of sparkling raindrops falling from your hair.
take it in.
the stinging sharpness of ash and pine,
the gentle beckoning of blooming magnolias across golden fields.
take it in.
take it all in, and be at one with your soul.
sheltered by the safe haven of the world,
be still,
and
breathe.
feel.
be.
I really like the vivid imagery and descriptions your poems have. I like your choice of leaving all the words lowercase,it makes the formatting look more interesting.
ReplyDeleteI like the imagery and sensory detail! I like how you are showing instead of telling & all the words like "golden" and "honey" fit really well into this poem.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very descriptive. You have a very strong figurative language using different senses. This poem is also very similar to the poems about the Tao that we read. I also like the constant formatting and repetition of the poem.
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