Out of my stupor, out of my sleep
Above the clouds, above reality
A dragon stands guard
Your favorite animal
in front of the jail cell
that hides your heart
The slight tremor in your lip
You are afraid
of getting hurt again
Out of my stupor, out of my sleep
The lone moon wanders the sky
Deprived of love, deprived of affection
Just like me, it searches for answers
Without knowing what questions to ask
My love for you
is like a garden
The white, picket fence
is my reluctance to let you in
It took years for me to grow
My feelings are my flowers
My laughs are my leaves
You watered me, day after day
Making me feel special,
Making me feel loved
Out of my stupor, out of my sleep
I am tied to you
Even with the blood we share
You made me believe I was the enemy
The antagonist in the story you wrote
A shadow of your malice
Lifeless and worthless
And yet, you cheated the game
You dropped the cure to my disease
down the dirty gutter
With your hidden sword
You slashed every delicate, vulnerable
flower in my garden
You are a bitter snake
Every glare is a toxic bite
As you writhe around my neck
Squeezing the life out of me
I am choking, gasping for air to breath
You turn away
Out of my stupor, out of my sleep
You sit at the piano
Your fingers strumming
a haunting lullaby
Instead of helping me sleep,
my mind races
You caused me this insomnia
With your pernicious claws
You slash my beloved leaves
leaving the scarred, flawed thorns
My agony satiates your hunger
like a ravenous wolf during a full moon
Out of my stupor, out of my sleep
I inch away from you
At the dinner table
You didn’t even notice.
Mira, this is a beautifully written poem! It includes so many different poetic devices like repetition, metaphors, and rich word choices. I especially loved the line where you talk about the white picket fence and also how you connected yourself to a flower. Many of the stanzas and descriptions allow me to picture an image in my head, very good!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your poem. I loved your choice of words and the way you chose to add line breaks. There was also a lot of imagery in your poem.
ReplyDeleteI really love your poem! It includes so much depth with your emotions, and your many metaphors provide such clear imagery. The repetition throughout adds a lot to your poem. I really like your last stanza because all your metaphors and imagery build the tension up so high, which contrasts with the small action of you inching away at the dinner table. Very well done!
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