It’s grey outside
She comes home disappointment flashing
Down her face
Every day the same time
The same promise
The same broken promise
It’s drizzling outside
The cries echoing
The glass of her heart shattering
The broken promise whispering
Down the gloomy hallways
It’s raining outside
The cuckoo bird calling, yearning
The frigid wind sighing
As she cradles herself in bed
Her tears falling
It stopped raining outside
The clouds are dry
There is no more water to fall
There is no more left to feel.
I liked how you repeated the stanzas by connecting the weather to emotions. My favorite line is "There is no more left to feel" instead of saying that maybe after it is sunny again, everything is all happy. Also, I like how you indented each line because the structure adds to your message.
ReplyDeleteThe way that you formatted your poem makes it very interesting to read, and gives more meaning to each of the stanzas. I really liked how at the end of the first stanza, you had the same like just with the phrase "broken promise," because it shows why the speaker is upset.
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